Hello Blog Walking.....
I come back to write my new topic. Now my new topic is Tugu Pahlawan. Tugu in English is monument. Pahlawan in English is heroes. Tugu Pahlawan is symbol of my town. Why like that? Tugu Pahlawan was built to remember heroes from Surabaya that fight against Dutch in 1945. At that time all of citizen in Surabaya fight against Dutch to defend independence of Indonesia, especially Surabaya. There was a moment that one of Surabaya’s citizen tear Dutch flag. The citizen tears the blue one of the flag. Because Indonesia’s flag is Red-White.
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If you see Tugu Pahlawan, maybe you’ll think that the monument like a big pencil. Because when I was a child, I always called it Big Pencil. The monument is white, and then at the end is pointed like pencil. Inside Tugu Pahlawan area, there is a underground museum. If I’m not mistake, the price to enter the museum is cheap. It’s about Rp5000,00/person. Inside the museum, we can see some guns/weapon, some pictures in the past, old car, and some dramatically sculptures. Also there are some dioramas that tell history. The histories that very famous in citizen are Jembatan Merah and citizen that tears the Dutch flag. Besides museum, Tugu Pahlawan’s area also has large field. Usually in the weekend there are some events that hold there. Like the stage of fun bike or fun walk, and also stage for concert some bands/singers to celebrate Surabaya’s birthday (31 May). The entrance of Tugu Pahlawan is the sculpture of The first President and co-president of Indonesia. They are Ir.Soekarno and Moh.Hatta. The sculpture is tell when they was read proclamation script to Another habit is every weekend, there are many seller sell anything around outside Tugu Pahlawan’s area. It’s always makes traffic jam around there.
How do you think about Tugu Pahlawan guys? Is it interesting right? So if you are in Surabaya, you must visit Tugu Pahlawan! One of historical place in Surabaya. Thank you...
(Nindy)
Hi Nindy :)
ReplyDeleteA very nice article I must say:) You have provided the readers with some explanations, background history and you have translated Tugu Pahlawan as the Heroes Monument which is crucial for people who don't know the Bahasa Indonesia (myself among them :P )
One thing you should always do while writing is remember about the past tense of some verbs. You write at the beginning that "At that time all of citizen in Surabaya fight against Dutch". Since you mean the year 1945 it would be better to give that sentence in the past tense. And what is the past form of the word "FIGHT"? :) Right - "At that time all of citizen in Surabaya fought against Dutch..." A similar situation is with the next sentence "Surabaya’s citizen tear Dutch flag". It happened in the past so you check the past form of "tear" and write "Surabaya’s citizen TORE Dutch flag" :)
One more thing is that you sometimes lose some words :) "If you see Tugu Pahlawan, maybe you’ll think that the monument IS like a big pencil" for example.
And finally, you don't usually say "how do you think about something" but rather "WHAT do you think about something" So at the very end it would be better if you said "What do you think about Tugu Pahlawan guys?"
Still, this is a very nice piece of writing. The text is nice and coherent plus you gave the readers the map and the picture so it is even better :) I hope I can see your writing in the future :)
My regards :)
A very clear correction my dearest Wojtek, thank you so much. i will need your advice as a guidance for my writing too. Again thank you so much
ReplyDeleteThank you Silvana and be sure to have my help should the opportunity and a need arise :) Be in contact :)
ReplyDelete@Wojtas: million thanks
ReplyDelete@wojtas : waw, I made many mistakes :g: Thank's for your detail correction :) in the future, I'll be more thoroughly to write new articles :D THANK YOU VERY MUCH :h:
ReplyDeleteDon't worry about it Nindy :) just give it your best and try never to repeat your mistakes and you will become a proficient writer in no time :) And you are welcome :) I am waiting for some new piece of writing from you :)
ReplyDeleteokay, I hope I'll be better to write my new topics :) And I also want you always give me a detail comment ... hehehehee
ReplyDeleteblog walker, I think :c:
ReplyDeletenot blog walking :)